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TOEFL GRE GMAT Sample Essays - Essay # 509 - The following appeared in an editorial from a newspaper serving the town of Saluda. "The Saluda Consolidated High School offers over 200 different courses from which its students can choose. A much smaller private school down the street offers a basic curriculum of only 80 different courses, but it consistently sends a higher proportion of its graduating seniors on to college than Consolidated does. By eliminating at least half of the courses offered there and focusing on a basic curriculum, we could improve student performance at Consolidated and also save many tax dollars." Discuss how well reasoned . . . Etc.

Saluda Consolidated High School

Topic 509: The following appeared in an editorial from a newspaper serving the town of Saluda. "The Saluda Consolidated High School offers over 200 different courses from which its students can choose. A much smaller private school down the street offers a basic curriculum of only 80 different courses, but it consistently sends a higher proportion of its graduating seniors on to college than Consolidated does. By eliminating at least half of the courses offered there and focusing on a basic curriculum, we could improve student performance at Consolidated and also save many tax dollars." Discuss how well reasoned . . . Etc. | Score & Analysis

The argument that the reduction in the courses offered and focus on the basic curriculum will improve the performance of students at Consolidated omits some important concerns that must be addressed to substantiate the argument. The latter part of the argument basically makes a comparison with some other school. This cannot logically favor the argument.

Most conspicuously, the argument does not address the cause of the problem of poor student performance at Consolidated, the quality of teachers, the infrastructure of the school, the manner of selecting a course. First the argument assumes that the cause of the problem is more options in courses offered. It may be that the High School does not have good teachers to teach the courses. Moreover each teacher may be burdened with more number of courses if the quantity of staff is less in the school. This will definitely not ameliorate the students performance.

Second, the argument never addresses the infrastructure of the school and how a better infrastructure can cause students to improve. If the students are not given the basic amenities to carry on their work then the students can never polish themselves in the particular course.

Finally, if the students are choosing there subjects say by means of bidding then they may not always get the subjects they are confident of. They might be offered courses in which they are not interested because a particular course cannot be opted by say more than 60 students.

Because the argument leaves out several key issues, it is not sound or persuasive. If it included the items discussed above insted of solely emphasising on the number of courses offered, the argument would have been more thorough and convincing.

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