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Topic 509: The following appeared in an editorial from a newspaper serving the town of Saluda. "The Saluda Consolidated High School offers over 200 different courses from which its students can choose. A much smaller private school down the street offers a basic curriculum of only 80 different courses, but it consistently sends a higher proportion of its graduating seniors on to college than Consolidated does. By eliminating at least half of the courses offered there and focusing on a basic curriculum, we could improve student performance at Consolidated and also save many tax dollars." Discuss how well reasoned . . . Etc. | Score & Analysis The above editorial omitted some important items that must be addressed to substantiate the opinion and it did not provide enough support or proof of the main idea. First, the reason why Consolidated`s proportion of students entering college is lower than that of the smaller private scholl is not persuasive. Second, the definition of student`s performance is debatable. According to the editorial, Consolidated`s lower proportion of students entering college than that of the private school is due to Consolidated`s offering too many different courses; however, I think it is not compelling. It should tell us what the college wants, then we can compare whether Consolidated`s curriculum comply with the requirment of the college. If the college needs the scores of Consolidated`s 200 courses, the editorial`s cause of low proportion of students entering college is certainly wrong; otherwise, the related cause is correct. Personally, I think the edtorial`s definition about student`s performance is controversial. According to the article, the performance of a student who can enter college is good; otherwise, if the student cannot enter college his performance is not good. I will argue that the standard to judge student`s performance rests on whether the student will become a useful person to the society in the future. If a student can learn a variety of courses in school, it will certainly be beneficial to his future life and help him to become a useful person to the society when he grows up. In summary, the editorial is not sound and persuasive because it left out some paramout items. If it had discussed the issues I mentioned above rather than simply comparing two different data and jumping to a conclusion, it would have been more compelling and thorough. - written by ANONYMOUS | Computer score: 4 What to do: |
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